[Fan-Fic] A Hero's Memories

[jhtv]

Ooo. Add my char that I made up =)

Name: Myst

Class: Beginner (Perma Beginner)

Lvl: 14

Description: Rich (his brother gives him godly stuff) but modest. Also does things in ways people don't think of.

[Kon]

If you need another guy, here it goes.

Name: Flip
Job: Assassin
Level: He's level 29, but for your fanfic, he's level 13.

Attitude: Neutral

Mood: Very quiet person. Does not like fighting, but if he has to protect his friends, he gives it all he got. (maybe the bad guys captured a friend of him and force Flip to work for them.)

[Teroration]

MOAR CHAPTERS NOW!

And I'm waiting for when you need bad guys. :p

[Xorten]

Sorry, I've run out of ideas.
Just couldn't think what else past this.

[Slerotin]

I think you're doing fine. If you're not sure of where you're going next, you could always take a side track and add some side story. Like what exactly happened to Marissa after she was "killed" the first time (more description on what exactly happens during the "dark ritual"?)? Why and where did the Dark Master disappear to in chapter 2 only to reappear in 3? (Was THAT the "dark ritual"?) Where's the real Athena Pierce? Did Marissa do something to her? How did Marissa turn "dark" in the first place? How does the Dark Master "know" dark power is being used? (Is there a disturbance in the force?;) ) Why would the Dark Master even care that someone uses this power? Are there any "good" guys that can also tell this power is being used? How's the Hero feeling now that he's lost Marissa twice?

I hope that helps a little. Writing a full story is NOT easy. Even with something as short as fanfic. So I commend your efforts.

[vkaod]

Hi, its been july since i logged in and u writen only 1 more chapter???:confused:

Anyway, this is my made up character if u want to add him.

Name: Duke

Job: Ice lightning mage. lvl 14.

Attitude: A little stuck up but would risk his life for any of his friends. Pretty much a good guy. Quite rich too.