I'll attempt to add dialogue, but if it looks like phail to me, I'm keeping it do dialogue....>.>;;
For a novel, dialogue is what makes the characters memorable. The reader gets more attachment to the characters if we could put a personality to them. Reading what they say and how they interact with each other is the best way to do that. Your skill at building your characters is probably what will characterize your story as really really good or just another average fanfic attempt.
I'll attempt to add dialogue, but if it looks like phail to me, I'm keeping it do dialogue....>.>;;
<edit> it should be choose...She explained to me that there were 4 different jobs that I could chose once I finished my training course. ~ chapter 2
im editor:D:D:D
want edits by email, IM or post?
im such a grammar freak in fanfics
Don't kill me for double posting.....*hides from double poster haters*
Another edit for Chapter 2, near the end. Grammatically, it does not make sense.
Grammatically, it does not make sense.As I stepped out of the portal, Sera said that I had done it all wrong. I needed to release my body, and simply allow the portal to take me allow.
Please don't kill me....*hides*
If you're a grammar freak, shouldn't you be typing right, with punctuation and stuff?
Correcting the second error pengu posted, the last word isn't needed.
Monster Hunter Tri Status:
- Hunter Rank: HR1 (Yay, me noob)
- Favourite Weapon: Switch Axe
- Current Most Proficient Weapons: Switch Axe, Hammer
- Current Armour: Barroth Set + Lagiacrus Set
- Current Most Hated Monster: Rathalos
(Stop flying, wings fer' brains!)
Proper grammar would look more like this:
Don't kill me for double posting.....*hides from double poster haters*
Another edit for Chapter 2, near the end. Grammatically, it does not make sense.
Please don't kill me....*hides*
Please don't make this a conversational thread.....>.>;;
Er... I need to change a few things and a few adjectives on here... I'll Email it to you... ADD Ze Credits soon. I'll help you with Chapter 4, if you're not already done.
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Goals:
(•) Get to 999.
( ) Get to 1.
( ) Get to 2.
( ) Get to 3. :D
Chapter 3 ftl...T_T"
Its kinda boring, but chapter 4 will pick up the pace! I hope!
Still no dialogue ftw! :D