Once Upon a Time In Maplestory

[XxKiraYamatoxX]

- The letter 'i' is supposed to be capitalized when alone.
- 'Your' is used to refer to something belonging to someone else. You're is short for 'You are'.
- Full fill? I don't understand.

So if you want to make a comic, why are you posting a story here? To be honest... it resembles a wall of text. The bold makes it look even worse. I forgot to mention this earlier, but you should at least clean up your stories more so that people reading it actually think it's a story instead of a wall of illegible text, which usually comes about due to lack of paragraphing. You should take a leaf out of the other writers' books and look at how they do paragraphing. It makes things look a LOT neater.

And if you neglect your spelling, you're probably never going to get better in the future. No matter how silly it is, you should at least spell it right... learn from your mistakes and don't do the same mistake twice.

[ToxinOfSouls]

Kira i understand what you are saying most of the advice you gave me is the same stuff other people have already told me on other threads so pretty much you are repeating what has been told.

[Lunasaku]

Couple things. The way you state their names makes them appear as in-game names. A space between could help a lot. (DragonMan = Dragon Man) Also, since you are referring to more than one thing.

"monsters feet" = "monster's feet" (one monster) or "monsters' feet" (two or more monsters)
That's my personal irk.

If you want to make a comic, I suggest Bannedstory.
http://www.maplesimulator.com/ > simulators > Bannedstory 3