English CP Essay

[FailFTW]

I hate required page lengths. So glad my English 102 instructor didn't believe in page lengths. My essays were on average 2 to 3 pages and I got good grades because the teacher liked how quick I was to get to the point.

[rasudoken]

Her feedback on my essay. This is it, none on the second page.

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This was the prompt that I chose (I HAVE NO CLUE WHY I CHOSE THIS PROMPT MY FRIENDS SAY THAT IT WAS THE HARDEST)

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Choose one of the following prompts and write a complete well-constructed essay (minimum 5 paragraphs = INTRO with thesis statement, three bodies paragraphs which includes topic sentence, 2 concrete details plus 4 commentary sentences and a concluding sentence each)

Prompt 4)
The eyes of T.J. Eckleburg convey a fourth theme in this novel. George Wilson compares them to the eyes of God looking over the Valley of Ashes. The unmoving eyes on the billboard look down on the Valley of Ashes and see all the immorality and garbage of the times. By the end of the novel some critics argue that these unmoving eyes symbolizes that God is dead. Support or refute this statement.

[Tesiqurasa]

You never tied it back to the eyes O.o


oh god

Don't tell me you chose "the eyes" for the reason I'm thinking....

[rasudoken]

you never tied it back to the eyes o.o


oh god

don't tell me you chose "the eyes" for the reason i'm thinking....

okay but a 50/100 would have been fine right

[Tesiqurasa]

Idk

I'd have to see the grading rubric and sit through your class. Maybe your teacher wants you to redo it? I'd go see her asap (like...tomorrow morning if necessary)

[FailFTW]

Don't tell me you chose "the eyes" for the reason I'm thinking....

Rasu you would've gotten extra credit if you cited Clockwork's eyes.

[rasudoken]

Idk

I'd have to see the grading rubric and sit through your class. Maybe your teacher wants you to redo it? I'd go see her asap (like...tomorrow morning if necessary)

Absolutely no re-dos. She said that this is the grade we're getting and that we need to move on.

[Tesiqurasa]

So you know for certain that ---/100 is a 0?

[rasudoken]

So you know for certain that ---/100 is a 0?

In her gradebook it is, I don't think she'll let me off with not having anything (unless a -/100 is still considered a 0? If so then I'm unsure)

[ClericLordLeo]

I skimmed over it and it looked like you just summarized the story.
And the essay itself is super short.
Not enough commentary.

Also try to state which pages your quotes come from.